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A late night conversation
A table for two
Some candles, some music
It’s not that hard to do
A schizophrenic desire
Shunned, forgotten, but true

The empty gaze in the mirror
Staring right back at you
What’s beyond those tired eyes?
If only I knew
Things were simpler once
When I had nothing to prove

Walking on eggshells
And breaking them all
Beating a dead horse
Head, blood, against wall
Do I throw it all away?
Exit, stage left, another day

I could listen to you all day long
Inspired, enchanted, carried a song
So where did we go wrong?
On a freeway of life
A one way street
Just my luck, a dead end, well ain’t that sweet
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I know it's disjointed, lacks rhythm and is all over the place. It's meant that way.
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~Kilmyana Apr 10, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
This is great! It all works together so well...and such truth found as well.
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:icontar1988:
That life has a 'dead' end, sounds rather true to me :) For that line alone, I would have fav'd it :p
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*Black-Roses-Fall Apr 9, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Mmm. Fantasic piece is fantastic.

Faved for sure :)
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:iconn-g-e:
Thank you :)
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~Konjuku Apr 9, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Disjoint? I liked it.

Loved the rhyme and how it flew.

The sudden end, seems rough, abrupt... Like a dead end, now, ain't that sweet? =p
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:iconn-g-e:
Haha :D Thanks :)
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:iconwisemanbrandon:
It's, interesting.
It's like, out there, and the sporadicalness is intriguing. I like it =)
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:iconn-g-e:
Thanks mate, glad you enjoyed it :)
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