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I’m lying ten feet underground
The penance for all the things that I’ve done
Can’t breathe, can’t see, clawing away
But the earth won’t give in
Buried alive, for things I don’t know
Suffocating underneath it all

Darkness surrounds this resting place of mine
My only company are these dying thoughts
I did not deserve this fate
For the sins I did not create
Something is pulling away at me
The horrific silence will not let me be

Why am I stuck here all alone
Where have all the people gone
Surely I had not been the only one
Through whom the tranquility came undone
Forgotten soul in an empty shell
Rotting away in this forsaken hell

I hear them digging, I might be saved
Or am I hallucinating, imagining salvation
The body is starving for illumination
Slipping away into a catatonic state
The flame of life slowly fades away
As the sun bursts through, it’s too late
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This was supposed to have been a metaphor, but I changed directions in the middle and then it went horribly wrong. It's one of the worst poems I have ever written (and it was originally supposed to have been a song, but I couldn't find music for it). Published on my blog in 2005 and pulled a few days later.

So why am I posting it here? I don't know, maybe as a reminder to myself of some of the crap I have managed to write over the years.
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:iconpyrox666xpheebs:
Its mot crap.. its different to what you write now but not crap...

i often ponder about your life... you dont give too much away =P
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:iconn-g-e:
Meh, it's crap, trust me, I know crap when I write it ;)

My life...my life is not as exciting as it used to be. These days, I'm an old, respectable member of the society, with a nice 14 hour a day job...in a stable relationship for over 3 years now...yeah...that's my life. My past on the other hand, well, that's kind of there in my poetry. Sometimes I miss the old me, but only sometimes ;)
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:iconpyrox666xpheebs:
Hehe sounds exciting to me both ways :)
And old =P? Your not old!!! How old are you =P!?

hehe =P and.. :) Its good you got past all the things in your past :) And become the awesome guy you are today ^_^
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:iconn-g-e:
How old? It's on my profile, I just made it a little bit difficult by writing it in Polish ;) But ok, I'll make it easy ;) 29 :) I know that's not old, but it all depends on the frame of reference, to some people I'm an ancient fossil :D
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:iconpyrox666xpheebs:
Hehe =P Lol thats what that gobbledegook actually said =P teehee :giggle:

Your not old ^_^ Rhiannon who's 8 said your not old until your 100 =P
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:iconn-g-e:
100? I doubt I'll live that long, but it's kind of reassuring ;)

Going back to my life story...one of the reasons I say very little about it (or myself) is that if I told everyone everything, that wouldn't make me much of a mysterious persona, now would it? ;) And I'd like to think of myself as the mysterious type, lol.
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:iconpyrox666xpheebs:
hehe=P i know what you mean =P hehe =P

Your like... the guy in the dark.. standing by the street lamp but not in it with the dark long coat and the black cap =P

They know your there =P but they dont know who you are =P you just reek of mystery =P
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~canticum Sep 15, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
crap = good fertilizer
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:icontar1988:
Actually, I have to agree with you. This is crap =D
well, compared to the jewels of poetry that you normally create that is.
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:iconrmrippers:
to be quite honest i dont think thsi si your worst. it probably just feels like that because its not what you wanted it to be. but it is good in its own right
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