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You used to hold me tight
In your embrace I’d fall asleep
Every single night
Absorbing moisture when you’d weep
Precious little teddy bear
In its fluffy cuddly flair

We used to go on walks
Gripping tightly to your back
We had long, involving talks
You’d take me off the beaten track
I was privy to your dreams
Little tearing at my seams

Then one day, you left me alone
And I had to sleep on the floor
I was thrown off my throne
You didn’t need me anymore
You’ve grown so beautiful and strong
And in your life I no longer belong

I watched you talk on the phone
And as you brushed your hair
Fearing the unknown
Your forsaken teddy bear
Covered with dust
Thrown out with disgust

Deprived of all that’s true
I cry my crystal tears
No one to cuddle to
Facing all my fears
Out on a garbage heap
Embracing eternal sleep
It's kind of unfinished, but I don't think I would come back to this one, so I'm posting it as is.
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:iconpyrox666xpheebs:
*huggles teddy bear* I wont leave you :hug:
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canticum Aug 10, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
reminds me of the velveteen rabbit, without all the happy bit at the end.
anyway, I think it's good! as usual :P
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:iconn-g-e:
I don't care much for happy endings, I find them rather unrealistic as opposed to the sad conclusions. Life usually prefers the latter.
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canticum Aug 12, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
yeah, that's true, unfourtunatly.. the ending of the Velveteen rabit always seemed rather stupid to me.
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:icontar1988:
I completely agree with RMRippers on this one.
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:iconn-g-e:
Thanks :) I'll try to write something happy and optimistic for my next piece. There's just way too much sadness in my poems lately :)
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:icontar1988:
I've got no problems with that, I kinda like tragedy :)
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:iconrmrippers:
awwwwwww thats so sad !

love it very much, made me all :( but :) cos its good :P
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:iconn-g-e:
Yeah, it was meant to be sad... Thanks mate :)
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:iconmagicaljoey:
It doesn't seem unfinished, it is kind of just right as is.
It's sad, but I do like it.
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