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Dear mum,
Don’t cry for me
The choices were mine to make
It was my will, not a mistake
You had a plan for me
Something I could never be
And so I did what I had done
And it all came undone

Dear dad,
Don’t cry for me
There was nothing you could do
I shut you out, there was no way through
You nurtured and cherished me
Protected, happy and free
But I did what I had done
And it all came undone

Dear friends,
Don’t cry for me
The times we shared were magical
Even if I seemed a bit hysterical
We hung out and talked for hours
Rolled around in a bed of flowers
Yet I did what I had done
And it all came undone

Dear lover,
You won’t cry for me
You will breathe a sigh of relief
Ponder our interaction so brief
You have no way of knowing
Your responsibility for the foregoing
You did what you had done
And with it I came undone
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Last one for the next few days. I'm off on business tomorrow and won't be back till Monday.

As for the poem itself, I don't know...I started writing it a month ago (first two stanzas) and then got stuck (it was supposed to have been Unplugged [link] but then my idea for it changed). Got back to it now and somehow I managed to get it together. It's not what I initially envisaged, but, like, whatever.
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:iconpathunknown:
Oh, I like it. Reminds me of one of the poems I wrote.. now if only I could remember which one and where it was.. >.>
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:iconn-g-e:
Thanks, appreciated :)
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~canticum Aug 25, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
:) nice job, I like it!
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:iconn-g-e:
Thank you very muchly :D
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~canticum Aug 27, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle: muchly
oh, and welcome! welcomely? :O whatever
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:iconrmrippers:
i really like it. and i agree with Tar: one of the better poems iv read recently
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:iconn-g-e:
You must've not read a lot of pomes lately then ;) Thanks mate, glad you liked it :)
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*Black-Roses-Fall Aug 24, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
I love the parent stanzas.

Great stuff man, faved for sure :)
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:iconn-g-e:
Thank you...much appreciated :)
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:iconpyrox666xpheebs:
im writing a similar poem to this.. ive been working on it for a while

love this... its really written well :hug:
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