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You left him standing
Alone in the rain, watched him
As he faded away
The face you once held so dear,
No longer will it brighten up your days
And as weeks and months go by
You wave and wave goodbye
But he’s been long gone and will not see,
Will not care, for you stole his dreams
His heart and his soul for eternity

Mistakes are made
Tears are cried
Farewells and parting ways
Yet you don’t waiver
Your heart of stone
Beats for no one, not even your own
Salvation you seek, but you only take
And never give, that is not your way,
No compassion just possession,
Frustration, obsession, loneliness

And in the end when you reach for the sky
Demand what you’ve left just lying by
It will not come and you know why
Just once a chance you did not take
Has been wasted, without regrets,
Or so you wish, hope and deceive,
But we know the truth, you and I,
As it falls apart, we just stand by
As it fades, floating away
We just stand there, waving goodbye.
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I wrote this a while back for a friend of mine.
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:iconpyrox666xpheebs:
Wow this incredible!
Very deep :)
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:iconn-g-e:
Thanks...not too deep I hope ;)
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~canticum Aug 11, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, good job!
I like the title/ending.
And yet again I fail at saying what's good about it :P
ah well...
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:iconrmrippers:
again another nice poem... very deep. lol at your twatty friend
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:iconghbatt:
Wow, a pretty good piece. I can see why your twat of a friend didnt react much to this piece, it is a very complex poem, which takes a bit of time to fully appreciate. The imagery is quite good, as it really helped to sell the piece. I really like the first stanza, it is by far the most powerful.

I would critique the rhyme here. I dont think it added much to the flow, and it seemed to limit you in a couple of places.

Bravo!
-gh
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:iconn-g-e:
Thanks. I didn't think of it as being very complex at the time of writing it, but perhaps you're right. As for why my friend didn't react much to this... It's hard to admit the truth sometimes ;)

I'm glad you enjoyed it, thanks again :)
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:iconghbatt:
Not a problem, it was a good piece! Thanks for posting it!
I hope you can check out my work too!
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:iconn-g-e:
Will do :) *makes a mental note* ;)
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:icontar1988:
And how did that friend react to this ?
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